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ObitoxKakashi Doujinshi "Other Days" Chapter 9: Disclosed Dream pg.14. THE END.

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Waaaa…it ended!TT3TT Thank you very much for reading, I hope you enjoyed the story and the artwork was interesting to look at. Thanks for everyone who faved the pages and even more thanks for people who commented on most (or all!) pages.*bows* I really appreciate your support.

Myself, I’m satisfied with the story and the ending.^^ I’m content with all the pages and think that I couldn’t have done the project any better than this. I changed the storyline a lot in the end because I wanted to avoid clichés and too sappy endings but like I said, I think it’s good like this. It (hopefully) leaves the reader satisfied but still gives a chance for a sequel.

Speaking of which…I’m already planning continuation for this story.^^; I’ve written the new script quite a lot actually, but there’s another project I want to make before that, and I’d also like finish StOve at some point>_> For more information about that, see my journal.

Reviewers, notice this!
I hope you guys could leave a critique if you’re able to, considering the whole Doujinshi of course – the plot, artwork and maybe what kind of feelings and thoughts the story awakened in you. I left the "please don't nag about these irrelevant stuff" things out because everyone ignored it…=u=U
Also, if you write a long review, please read the whole comic once through to get a proper hold of it.^^ That’s all.
If you’re not able to write a dA Critique you can simply make a long rant comment, I’m not too picky about those. Feedback is welcome in all ways, nevertheless.
This comic is pretty old by now (I finished it three years ago) so I've improved so much that it's kind of useless to leave any constructive criticism… But I always read comments so if you liked the story or ObiKaka anyway, please feel free to express your feelings. =)

Thanks once more! Hopefully you had fun and are gonna read more of my stuff later on.:heart:

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Naruto (c) Masashi Kishimoto
story & art (c) elizarush [me]
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Well im just a small noob when it comes to something like thsi but i really enjoyed this doujin. I was hoping for another ending but i think it ended really good. I was thinking for a moment it would be more serioursly or something but it was sweet and something i didnt expect on a right amour of sweetness. I loved the comic in this and small Sasuke and Naruto just made it better to see where the timeline was. Im glad to see every bit of your art, it almost look like the original with a hint of original style which did it much more great. The best thing is this is like the ONLY ObiKaka doujin i ever seen, there isnt many of theese loveable things and im glad you made this. I love every bit of this. to critique this would maybe be... oh its hard to find anything. Well ill just finish it here, i think its perfect.
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well this will be my second DAcritique. funny how both are for you ^^

I always find it difficult to critique on the vision, i don't know if it reflects a Theme or Idea well >< ... what would the Theme be? friendship? love? ... in that case, yes it does reflect it really well. it's believable, you can relate to the story. Love doesn't appear in a mere second it has to grow; which is what you showed here. Obito and Kakashi liked each other for YEARS! and they never told each other until they were 18. this is how things generally go. when you fall in love with your best friend you don't blare a love confession, no, you worry. because admitting your feelings could mean losing him even as a friend. (been there XD) and i think you portrayed that worry quite well. Neither Kakashi nor Obito thought of confessing at the start, they struggled with themselves but they'd never say it out loud. not that soon anyway. so well done!

for Originality.... god, you know i'd give you a high rate! XD this is THE FIRST Obikaka doujinshi i ever had the pleasure of reading. just THAT would entitle you to Originality-trophy of the year.
And not only that but the way the story proceeds. the way you kept Obito alive; your version was creative and believable. it could have happened like that in the real thing. -and i wish it had- and Obito is one creative bugger with you lol the way he very slowly pushes Kakashi, creeping himself closer and closer into the man's plastic bubble is just amazing. it fits his personality in my view. Obito is a difficult character to portray simply for the reason that he doesn't appear a lot. a lot of people either make him scarily similar to Naruto or somehow let his personality make a 180 turn and make him similar to Sasuke. but i like the way you portray him; he's blunt but not too blunt (like Naru.) he sneaks a bit more and argues with himself (like Sasuke). you found a midway, and i like this version of him a lot.

For technique, like you said; we can see your progress. we saw how you struggled with some characters at the start and along the way grew custom to them and made your own version. like Kakashi i lost count of how many times you admitted you cursed him and we could see you struggled sometimes but further on he seemed a lot easier for you to portray. especially his emotions. thanks to his appearance Kakashi is a master at hiding his feelings; so drawing them is just as (if not more) difficult. but you did great! we could tell how he felt even if he hides 24/7. same with Minato and Rin; you got better with them with every page that passed. with Obito.. i don't know; weirdly i always found him to just flow on you pages like he was so easy for you to draw. of course with him i also saw change and you got better at drawing him as well but i just always found him to be really good; drawn by your hand.

now Impact; did the story provoke emotions on our end? ... Hell yeah! god... i got so caught up in the story it was amazing. i knew how the characters felt and i could feel all the struggling and sadness, happiness...anything. all the feelings the characters felt; they were just so well portrayed, and everything helped with that. you made everything fit like a glove; emotions, expressions, scenery, actions.. they all went a long with one another. and it result in a great story. a great story that caught all of us to follow it from beginning to end. nagging you for more every single day. ^^

more proof how much we loved it XD i honestly am really excited to see how the sequel will go.
i'm not the type of person to give a top rating; it's like you say yourself "there is no such thing like perfection, there's always room for improvent."
so i didn't give you 5 stars every time =) don't worry about it! i still loved it.
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KellynKupcake Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2015
This was absolutely amazing! I loved every second of it. Thank you so much for making it. If only there was some smut to top it all off ;) but seriously it didn't need it. It was perfect! Thank you again. :)
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elizarush Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2015
Thank you very much for reading it! Happy to hear you enjoyed. =)
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rrr4 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2015
"it was awesome"
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lamxx204 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2015
Yay, it's done, but I loved every panel of it. 8D
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RiddleWraith Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2014
This was the best thing ever. :) I've liked this pairing for awhile but I could never find a freaking doujinshi until yours. I LOVE it. Thank you for this. Btw, you're an expert at making a person cry. >_> Just so you know.
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elizarush Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2014
aw, thank you very much! and sorry for making you cry, heh. glad to hear you liked it. =)
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SterekNaruSasuHPDM Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2014
Is there going to be a sequel featuring NaruSasu? Just curious since it hinted at the pair?????
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elizarush Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2014
There was going to be a sequel with it but I got occupied with real life stuff and was in the middle of working on another comic so long that I had to leave it drafted. :/
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SterekNaruSasuHPDM Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2014
ok, I was just wondering. Thanks for letting me know! :)
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Mystogan45 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2014
I have been reading this doujin while it was going on. Looking back it was actually my first encounter of this ship. And I love it soo soo much! I wish you could make more but I know you aren't going to anymore. Still, I come back to this doujin a lot and I love it still to this day
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elizarush Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2014
aw thanks~ nice to hear that. if you want to look up what I used to do after this comic you can check out ask-obikaka.tumblr.com, though it's not active anymore.
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KemenceiVivi Featured By Owner Edited Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I very liked it :) I'm a big fan of KakaObi :3 Keep it up! :)
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SakuMulti Featured By Owner May 29, 2014
I'm not gonna lie, this is one of my first encounters with ObiKaka and I'm so glad it was. This doujin was amazing, though it may be a bit old now. If I had the chance I would try and pick it up at a convention or something because it's so cute and just everything about it was great! The way it was drawn, the way they were characterized, and the way the story flowed, it was all amazing.
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elizarush Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014
oh, thank you very much! glad that your first encounter with this ship was a positive one. =) aw, I wish I had the time and energy to fix some (most) of the pages bc I would definitely put it up as a book if I could. But hey, at least you can read it here. Thanks again!
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Rboooks Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014
That was AMAZING! I love this shipping pair just because of your story and art! I mean I'll always love Kakashi with Anko but really this just made me want to switch to Kakashi and Obito! they were just too cute together to not love them! After all this fluffy, passionate doujin how could I not!? I think this pairing is now one of my new favorites, i can't wait to read/ see more from you and this fandom!   AMAZING! YOU ARE SIMPLY AMAZING!
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elizarush Featured By Owner May 20, 2014
Oh, thank you very much <3 that's very nice to hear. Glad you enjoyed my doujinshi even if you had doubts about the ship first :'D it's always cool if people start liking certain couples because of my work. u///u
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Rboooks Featured By Owner May 21, 2014
Your welcome :D (Big Grin) ! Seriously though you had a good story and the art was cute! Nod  Your work made me check out more of this shipping and i love ya for it Love  keep doing what your doing to show others how cute these two are together! CURSE YOU! Dancing Elsa Frozen - Olaf's Joy Icon 
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elizarush Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014
aww ta <3
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Rboooks Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014
 :) (Smile) 
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Sierra-Leiant Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
The plot was lovely, keeping to canon where it added dimension to the story, deviating where it needed to. You also made every scene count, something most amateurs miss. 
Thank you for making it relatively clean and letting emotions and downright sweetness take center stage! Even those iffy scenes were still fun and not overly sexual.
As far as art, the only thing I really noticed is that their heads almost always look to big for their bodies and many characters look younger than they actually are.
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elizarush Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
I hope you understand that I drew this thing a couple of years ago, so my style has changed and I have learned to draw better. I don't really care what people think of the art in my old comics anymore since that was long ago and has been an important part of my process in becoming better at drawing, even if it apparently was too distracting to you while reading some parts. Thank you for reading anyway.
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kallha Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
I have read this whole story about 3 times I love it so much😊❤️
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elizarush Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014
Aw, thank you very much~ <3
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MissTuliharja Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

I think this was really excellent doujinshi! I could clearly see improvement over the course of doujinshi. I think in the end your anatomy skills, shading and things like got really good thinking the first pages of this doujinshi.

And now about the story: I absolute loved it and I found it quite cute how Kakashi's and Obito's relationship did grow over the time. At times I felt slightly frustrated about Obito's stupid-ness but I guess that's just the part he is; goofy and rambling always before getting into the point. I loved how awkwardly Kakashi did go with Obito until he got enough comfortable, so they both could confess and be content what they're. I also liked how you included the duo taking care of Sasuke and Naruto. :heart: I found it just too adorable and if you're ever going to continue this, I believe those two little ones won't be like they're in canon thanks to Obito and Kakashi. Uuuh! I just loved this to pieces, lol. I hope my review was at least some of use, because I'm at the moment a bit fangirl-mode, mainly because all the cute moments in this but also the emotions, that you portrayed quite well. Life isn't all sunshine and rainbows, yet those two really made it! ^^

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elizarush Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
Thank you for your nice words <3 really nice to hear that! ^^
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MissTuliharja Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome. ^^
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purplestarxo Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013
I can't believe it ended.. I loved it a lot! It was amazing! No words other than that!
Step aside Naruhina, KakashixObito is coming in :3 
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blackholeripper10 Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
OH MY GOSH!!! THAT WAS AWESOME!!!!!!!! thank you for taking the time to draw all of that!!!!! It's so cute and hilarious!!!! loved it!!!!! and now I'm going to fave all of it!!!!!
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Scarlet-Onlooker Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Cutest sory I have ever read! I almost cried throughout the story, there were so many feels! I do hope to see you continue this story!
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elizarush Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013
Aww, thank you very much :) nice to hear you liked it. I'm not planning to continue this as a comic, but there's a blog which continues with the storyline a bit.--> ask-obikaka.tumblr.com
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Scarlet-Onlooker Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I have seen you about on tumblr I didn't know that the story was connected to that! Well dually noted!
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XshiroXchan Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
wow!! that was the best obikaka doujinshi I've ever read you just made my day, thanks for uploading so awesome tings it's really nice to see awesome doujinshi now and then, thank you again for sharing your awesome work with us!!! Meow  arigato gozaimasu!!!:iconfoxyayzplz: 
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elizarush Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013
Thanks for reading it! Glad to hear you enjoyed the story. :)
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twisterfox321 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013
FANGASM!!
everything sadded
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elizarush Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013
nonono everything happy! but hey, thanks for reading :) and thanks for the :+devwatch: too~
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twisterfox321 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013
I wish you would create a sequence
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elizarush Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2013
You mean a sequel? I wish I could. :/ But that's not happening as far as I know.
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twisterfox321 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013
That is ok, that is still a super explosion of infinite kawaii
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elizarush Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013
heh, thanks :')
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ObiTobiUchiha9311 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013
Thank you for being born, elizarush.
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elizarush Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2013
gosh U // v // U thank you for reading my comic!
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ObiTobiUchiha9311 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013
You're welcome. This made me so happy.
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AdamLoveless Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Student Artist
BEAUTIFUL
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vishmi Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013
i love this doujinshi so much, it made my day, thankx a bunch for making it
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elizarush Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013
Thanks for reading it, glad to hear you liked it. :)
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vishmi Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013
my pleasure!! ^_^
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ZeCraig Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ah... It ends.. ._. Well. I really enjoy it, it was very beautiful. I love this doujinshi so much, makes me wish to draw them together.
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elizarush Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013
Thank you~! And please do! There isn't much art of them anymore nowadays.
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ZeCraig Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I noticed and you're welcome.
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SaiyanHeart Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow, this was amazing!! I'm actually not a fan of yaoi but I think this was super well-done. I went on a favoriting spree and favorited a ton of pages. ^.^ Great story and great artwork!
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